Writing stuff like this.

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The first thing you must learn is how to format a script properly. For example dialogue is always lower case, yet you start with capitals, then change to lower case half way through. Look at other scripts, which you can download. Also how to format, again you can download this from the BBC. Be careful of your spelling - there are lots of basic spelling mistakes there. You seem a bit influenced by Hitchhiker's Guide, but that series had a very tight plot, which yours lacks. There are some interesting ideas, but you need a lot more than that.

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I hope you put it back up when you've worked on it more, Tiggy. You've got a good sense of comedy, that's obvious from your posts here.