In a little defence of the piece...there wasn't as much narration originally in the script. A lot more was added in the edit to hide problems created in production. Annoyingly the paid camera crew had not read the script, so they kind of just did their own thing...which created havoc in the edit. Extra cutaways and even extra scenes were included to try and hide bad shots, characters talking out of frame and camera's following characters which were not included in the next shot.
I still stand by the use of the narration, but i can understand that in certain parts it can potentially break up scenes rather than allowing them to flow...in particular between scenes with her and her flat mate...but again, they were there to hide problems. Also, i do believe the narration helped in the sense that in 12 minutes i'm trying to provide exposition for the character and the situation she's in...it is an easy way out, in a way...but also a great tool to skip the boring bits.
Regarding the Fleabag comparisons, i think this was always going to happen simply because there's probably not enough female comedy leads which have made any impact to the viewing public. People see white 20-ish (although I'd argue Fleabag is more 30-ish) girl who's a manic and doesn't play the straight character - and they will compare it to Fleabag. But i think both are quite different. The pace of this is a lot quicker, and there's no looking at camera. This has a narrator and the other doesn't, plus the tone is also a fair bit different. I think there can be more than one female masturbating on our tv screens
And to the person who said there wasn't enough jokes...I'd argue there's 121 jokes in this piece. Which excluding ending credits runs at 12:35, which roughly results in a joke every 6.2 seconds. The jokes range from verbal, to visual, to callbacks, to reveals and to freeze frame....and a lot of them are subtle, and most probably naively inserted believing people would spot them on repeat viewings...but then i realised most people don't repeat watch or freeze frame random people's videos on the internet like it's Westworld :p
Thanks for the taking the time to watch it and air your thoughts. I appreciate that all too often, somebody asks for feedback...and then argues that the feedback is wrong simply because it's not 100% positive. I'm not arguing the feedback is wrong (well, the joke count one i am)...i'm just continuing the discussion