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feedback on my rap/comedy music video about lotion

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kev jod

  • Thursday 30th November 2017, 3:18pm
  • England
  • 38 posts

I wondered why they make lotion specifically for men so I made a song. I would love to know how we can improve for next time, but also would like to know if anything was particularly good or worked well. Thank you so much for taking the time!

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ldvAVkoy-JA

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gappy

  • Saturday 2nd December 2017, 10:22am
  • Oxford, England
  • 2,019 posts

Valid target, and I like your awkward macho throwdowns, but it runs out of lyrics after a verse, and becomes boring. If you could develop it to come up with another 2 clever verses, it would be a winner.

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kev jod

  • Saturday 2nd December 2017, 3:19pm
  • England
  • 38 posts
Quote: gappy @ 2nd December 2017, 10:22 AM

Valid target, and I like your awkward macho throwdowns, but it runs out of lyrics after a verse, and becomes boring. If you could develop it to come up with another 2 clever verses, it would be a winner.

This is helpful. Thank you for your help! I appreciate you taking the time.