Critique These Hard! :)

can't decide which is the funniest, feedback?

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tYOxrpfq3ZM

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pkqUCHX_zDQ&feature=relmfu

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=j3JtzgICKbE&feature=relmfu

Neither can I..

Quote: Stylee TingTing @ April 15 2012, 9:03 PM BST

Neither can I..

So it's an attempt at saying none are funny or that all are lol :) Which would you say?

I'm saying that I can't be arsed to watch the links.

Be different: write some prose.

Quote: Stylee TingTing @ April 15 2012, 9:18 PM BST

I'm saying that I can't be arsed to watch the links.

Be different: write some prose.

Ah okay, what kind of prose? Stand up, or any? I will work on some for you.

NOT stand-up, shitcom, or any of the formulaic genres prevalent around here.

Write some prose about anything..

Youre decent performer but all 3 clips are way to long to keep my interest and you seem a bit fixated on shouting.

Sharpen your characters, sharpen your scripts and shout less and you'll be going places.

Quote: Stylee TingTing @ April 15 2012, 9:39 PM BST

NOT stand-up, shitcom, or any of the formulaic genres prevalent around here.

Write some prose about anything..

This is a comedy site. I have non comedy work but it would be best to discuss it outside of a comedy forum :)

Quote: sootyj @ April 15 2012, 11:03 PM BST

Youre decent performer but all 3 clips are way to long to keep my interest and you seem a bit fixated on shouting.

Sharpen your characters, sharpen your scripts and shout less and you'll be going places.

Thank you I will work on it. I do like to get loud time to time. I am still trying to figure out character control (sharpen). Thank you for the compliments!

Also, http://t.co/4XYY3Vkm Oliver RibCage is BACK! Don't forget about the recent newcomer who is super funny! http://t.co/KtzYvGeY

Both of those videos are great, to me. Please let me know what you think :)

Quote: andrew ebert @ April 16 2012, 9:51 AM BST

This is a comedy site. I have non comedy work but it would be best to discuss it outside of a comedy forum :)

You've never heard of comic prose, then?

Quote: Stylee TingTing @ April 16 2012, 1:32 PM BST

You've never heard of comic prose, then?

Yes, but "NOT stand-up, shitcom, or any of the formulaic genres prevalent around here." Kinda led me to believe you didn't want to see any kind of comedy lol. Comedy prose can be okay but why stop at that? I do the prose, then do the video, so it's thousands of times more effort than prose. Don't you want to see something from someone that is truly committed? And let's be honest, most comedy prose is dry, elementary joke level, and written like it's a research paper which is boring. Pirate