We see a really ugly hunchback stooping behind a bar
Above his head is a shelf of famous name Scotch whiskey
The Hunchback who is also deaf starts poking at the shelf with a broom handle.
Two gay men who had been arguing are now watching the hunchback as the whisky bottles totter.
GAY ONE
Terry love he's going to kill himself
GAY TWO
Frankie dear I don't give a dam
I can understand you avoiding the obvious gag, but you need to replace it with another, wouldn't you say?
Unless I'm missing something.
I didn't really get this. I see some type of Casablanca reference at the end, but I've never seen that so maybe that's why I don't get it. I'd avoid descriptions such as 'who is also deaf' as the audience wouldn't have the benefit of knowing he is deaf. It needs showing somehow.
Didn't get this one either Ted, but I do like the classic film theme.
Quote: Teddy Paddalack @ June 25 2013, 4:39 PM BSTGAY TWO
Frankie dear I don't give a dam
Frankie my dear I don't give a 'dram' ??
I didn't really get this. I see some type of Casablanca reference at the end, but I've never seen that so maybe that's why I don't get it. I'd avoid descriptions such as 'who is also deaf' as the audience wouldn't have the benefit of knowing he is deaf. It needs showing somehow.
game, set and match teddy. new balls.
Hands up as I got this one completely wrong a case of posting whilst being over confident.