New restaurant sketch!

Hi please give me some feedback on this sketch. It's a follow up to one I posted a few weeks back, or should I say, a dessert to the, ahem, main course that I..oh forget it!

INT. NIGHT. IN AN EXPENSIVE LOOKING RESTAURANT
TWO COMPETITIVE AND RATHER AFFECTED YOUNG EXECUTIVES SITTING AROUND A TABLE, PERUSING A MENU.

Waiter:
Would you like to see the dessert menu, gentlemen?

Man1:
Oh thank you, maitre d’or.

Man 2:
The breasticle of mongo crumble with a pud pull drizzle looks nice.

Man 1:
It does. I quite fancy the caramel queens in a Shalamar froth.

Man 2:
I read that Anthony Worrall Thompson’s restaurant specialises in the rum-buggered plum squidge.

Man 1:
He looks like a rum-buggered plum squidge.

Man 2:
I ate at Gary Rhodes’ restaurant last month. He did a lovely skinny pube gonk meringue.

Beat

Man 1:
He is a bit of a skinny pube gonk meringue himself.

Man 2:
Yes, yes, yes.

Man1:
And to think that our parents would eat a Delia Smith -style boiled egg washed down with a mug of Blue Nun!

Man 2:
And here’s us drooling over pomegranate cracknells on a flotsam of leatherberry fool .

THE WAITER APPROACHES

Waiter:
Are you ready to order dessert?

Man 1:
The Arctic Rolet for me please. Oh with custardo.

Waiter:
Would that be the Arctic Roll and custard, sir?

Man 1:
Ahem –

Waiter:
And for sir?

Man 2:
Jam Buttiti for me.

Waiter:
Very good, gentlemen.

Lol like it again. Especially the last section - Arctic Rolet with custardo. Clever, you have avoided puns and thigh slapping gags well done.

Nice, but essentially the same joke as before. Hopefully you can hit us with a nice rule-of-three final instalment twisticle?

I liked it a lot. If I were to be hyper-critical, I'd suggest that the Gary Rhodes is a blah blah is too similar to the AWT looks like a blah blah line. But it didn't ruin it for me, I was laughing at the fabulously riduculous food names. You may want to tweak the Delia Smilth - like egg line too, IMO. One the whole, great.

Excellent imagination for all the different items on the menu and it was nicely paced too.

Agree with most of the above - fallen into a trap I find myself in sometimes and have repeated a similar joke a couple of times. Baumski is spot on with his observation of your imaginative items on the menu - those alone are funny.
Made me hungry now too - I'm away for a Noudelle de pot
Andy

Hi Fred

I like this one. Very inventive.

Funniest moment is when you don't know what a 'rum-buggered plum squidge' is and feel a bit confused and the other guys says that AWT is one and you kind of nod along thinking, 'Yes, he is, isn't he?'

Quality.

Dan

Yeah very funny, some great dessert names, I loved "rum-buggered plum squidge!". And I agree with Steve about the Gary Rhodes line being a bit too repetitive.

I can't remember for definite but didn't the last sketch end with beans on toast? Where as "Arctic Rolet" although we all know what it is, it sounds quite posh here.....so the structure of the sketch feels different from the last one.

Thanks for the positive feedback. To be honest, I enjoy writing that kind of nonsense so much I will be returning to it in other forms (e.g, wine, cocktails, DIY etc) so expect more. Mine's a gin Bailey Rae with a gypsy's kiss and a dash of eel hammett.