British Comedy Guide

Let Me In - Vampire Comedy Sketch

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gappy

  • Tuesday 19th April 2016, 6:29pm
  • Oxford, England
  • 2,019 posts

Love the way you've both played this, and the FX at the start are really atmospheric too. I think maybe there's a wee bit too much of it*, and the end fizzles out a bit - perhaps "yeah, there was a problem with the garlic" could have been the punchline, with a withering look as the hero shuts the door..?

Good work overall, though. :)

*Default Critique comment #12B

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sootyj

  • Tuesday 19th April 2016, 8:12pm
  • England
  • 51,287 posts

That was very good you've obviously put a lot of effort into a polished product.

Nice to see something looking that good. Really looked like a TV sketch show.

Also a funny script, with character jokes and a good punchline.

Only minor niggles the intro dialogue about Twilight is a bit self conciouse you could lose that.

And yes the garlic reference could go. Also the guy in the house in a little nonchalant about stealing someone else's pizza.

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Babble Box

  • Thursday 21st April 2016, 9:10am
  • England
  • 14 posts

Thanks for the feedback, very useful stuff.

Definitely a learning curve on how long each sketch should be and what is and isn't needed. Actually got rid of an additional 3 minutes of material but I agree it's still a bit long.

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Carlos Manwelly

  • Sunday 24th April 2016, 7:11pm
  • Wales
  • 1,223 posts

I thought it was very well done, good characters and funny content.