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After realising he has no other option, senile, septuagenarian business mogul Arthur Goodwood sends his self-appointed 'business guru' daughter, Emily, to salvage his floundering tobacco factory, Big Cigs.

As Emily starts to fully comprehend that her third class business studies degree from Milton Keynes and simply having watched every episode of The Apprentice, seven times, might possibly not make her the best qualified person to transform the ailing enterprise, she also realises that this is her last chance to impress her father, win his love and approval and avoid being 'promoted' to executive hygiene operative at head office.