I remade my super short film based on feedback from this forum, what do you think? Thankyou all https://vimeo.com/153481731

That's neat, ok not the most original idea but it#s a great idea and the punchline is a surprise.

I think the weakness that makes this a B not an A for me is the intro and end advert are similar in style.

Very upbeat advertising.

I think if the first bit was perhaps, I dunno more philosophical sadder? Maybe gloomy jazz and a sad poem about love read over it?
Also you don't need to say he's lonely your script does that well enough

Thankyou for the feedback sootyj, glad you enjoyed it! I have taken your comments on board for if I ever make a similar type of video

The bit where you first see the snail made me laugh. Maybe if you could get Donald Trump and Sarah Palin to play the snails ?

Huge improvement, I like that a lot, well done. If I had a criticism it's that the stamper could be nastier/more in your face, to contrast better.