- Monday 13th November 2006, 11:33pm
- Stoke-on-Trent, England
- 2 posts
I've only just started scripting, but I'm kinda eager to shout from the rooftops, I'm sure you know what I mean. So, After weeks of idea swapping, jotting and tearing up paper I thought I had an idea, but after reading some scripts on here, I feel I may need to take a step back and re-think.
What we have here is kinda rough, but I thought I could get feedback from the start. I don't know if I'm getting ahead of myself.
The name of the show is 'Gentleman of Leisure' and here's a summary:
Following the interesting lives of a group of working class friends. The story will unfold with a chain of events within their local city.
Ben: Bit of a loner, but will be made likeable through pity. (Cringeville)
Kieran: Bit of a lad. Loves the ladies, hates their thoughts. Charmer, outgoing, competitive, and cheeky. (Could be seen as the protagonist)
Dawson aka Daws: Bit of a geezer, likes his ale, has domestics with Kieran a lot, but they buzz off it. (The relationship between him and Kieran would be seen as a married couple, bickering and what not)
Liam: Bit of a family man. As he is only there a bit of the time. Brother to Kieran, lover to anyone.
Ben's Over-protective Mother (regular character)
Psycho Girl (possibly regular)
We wanted to include wolf man from Gladiators, but seeing as this is a totally unrealistic idea, it could be easily taken out. The same with episode 2 we had the idea of involving a guy from a kids cartoon show called 'Blues Clues' If you've never heard of the show, it was on Nickelodeon. A real guy in a cartoon house, solving clues to find his dog blue. It was kinda trippy, but we thought including him as a skitzophrenic booked for a kid's party could be fun.
After one of our characters kids were begging to get him for their birthday party. The dad books him up, but he turns out to be a complete utter mental and believes that BLUE the fictional cartoon dog is actually real.
We've got pages and pages wrote down for the first 3 episodes, but haven't started scripting, I'm finding it difficult to word it. In what makes the best sense, and finding a good way to start it. The original idea was our character 'ben' getting woken up by his over protective mother and handed the phone, which is the daughter of one his mothers work friends. He's been set up on a blind date by his mother, that's how much of a loser he is. She turns out to be a goth, and lot's of calamity goes on. What worried me the most is locations, I feel I have too many, and no regularity.. apart from ben's house (kitchen) I don't know where I'm going with this. If anyone could give me some feedback on the characters it would be much appreciated.