Dan's Script editing

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Trinder

  • Thursday 19th December 2013, 9:01am
  • Brighton, United Kingdom
  • 180 posts

Morning,

Just got some feedback from Dan for a script. Five pages of succinct, insightful criticism. Forth time Dan's critiqued a script for me and every one has been excellent.

So, if you've got a script and need someone smarter than you to check it out, I highly recommend Dan.

http://www.dansweryt.com/script-editing.html

ho ho ho
Neil

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sootyj

  • Thursday 19th December 2013, 10:07am
  • England
  • 51,287 posts

I also edit scripts, infact if Stott's edited your script I am more than happy to edit his feedback.

I also can do your editing in the style of favourite 1980s comics.

It'll be like getting useless feedback from Cannon, Ball and Russ Abbot.

Spelling extra.

Grammar, piss off.

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swerytd

  • Thursday 19th December 2013, 12:18pm
  • Guildford, England
  • 7,521 posts

Thanks Neil! (And he has won Sitcom Trials stuff more than once, you know)

And I do not have a goatee! But I do have the same arthritis in my thumbs...

Dan

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blahblah

  • Thursday 19th December 2013, 12:39pm
  • sunderland, England
  • 1,130 posts

Do you do one act plays?

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swerytd

  • Thursday 19th December 2013, 1:25pm
  • Guildford, England
  • 7,521 posts

Traditional sitcom is more my thing, to be honest. But I can have a look if you like. It is a comedy, yeah?

Dan

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blahblah

  • Thursday 19th December 2013, 1:29pm
  • sunderland, England
  • 1,130 posts

In theory

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Lazzard

  • Thursday 19th December 2013, 3:49pm [Edited]
  • Ludlow, England
  • 4,381 posts
Quote: Trinder @ 19th December 2013, 9:01 AM GMT

Morning,
Forth time Dan's critiqued a script for me

Fourth.

That'll be three quid.

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sootyj

  • Thursday 19th December 2013, 3:52pm
  • England
  • 51,287 posts

Lazzard Trinder's sitcoms are all about famous, suspension bridges.

He says it helps SUSPEND THE DISBELIEF!

That'll be 50p for the correction and £3000 for the joke.

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Trinder

  • Thursday 19th December 2013, 5:08pm [Edited]
  • Brighton, United Kingdom
  • 180 posts

See, that's what happens when you don't get Dan to script edit for you. I think it was actually the fifth time as well, but I can't spell fifth.

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T.W.

  • Friday 27th December 2013, 8:18pm [Edited]
  • England
  • 15,786 posts

'Those who can't do, teach. Those who can't teach, teach gym.' - Woody Allen

'Those who can't teach gym, offer comedy script-editing services at a competitive rate.' - Me

Matt, Dan & indeed Marc Blake are all talented people. Everyone needs to pay the rent, so I hope you newbies all use their services. Then again, they should all be still working in getting their own stuff produced - in whatever 'media'.

I offer no paid script editing service. But if you send me a script I'll simply give you a yay (or nay) as to whether I think you should keep trying to write. I'm too busy on my own stuff to offer detailed analysis - and, fortunately/annoyingly, I work in a full time job which means I don't have to earn money elsewhere.

I've used script-editing/report services in the past. & it was great. But all it actually confirmed to me was that I could write comedy. They won't turn someone who can't into someone who can. Like everything else in life, to really succeed you have to possess a natural talent/flair.

This is why I'm not a huge porn star. :(

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Nil Putters

  • Friday 27th December 2013, 8:25pm
  • A galaxy far, far away or, England
  • 28,684 posts

I don't have script editing service, but if you send me cash you'll be a better person.

Good luck to all.

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sootyj

  • Friday 27th December 2013, 8:37pm
  • England
  • 51,287 posts
Quote: Nil Putters @ 27th December 2013, 8:25 PM GMT

I don't have script editing service, but if you send me cash you'll be a better person.

then why did I send you all those nudey photos?

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T.W.

  • Friday 27th December 2013, 8:57pm
  • England
  • 15,786 posts
Quote: Nil Putters @ 27th December 2013, 8:25 PM GMT

I don't have script editing service, but if you send me cash you'll be a better person.

Good luck to all.

L Ron Putters