Finger

Short sketch written and directed by myself. What do you all think? Should I take a premature retirement?

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IwSCluzIaPY

EDIT: Had a play around with some different music on it. Does this work better?

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=f28O8KOFLtY

Tonally it was a bit muddled I thought. It played out like a horror/thriller (supported by the score) but ended on a gag punchline. I felt like you should have gone one way or the other - either concentrated on the comedy or the drama. As it is you have a thriller setup that doesn't quite work (why exactly is she so blase about waking up with a missing finger?) and a comedy resolution that comes completely out of left field. That all said, it was a decent job in terms of direction, so you should definitely keep at it.

The tonal clash so that the punchline came out of nowhere was something I intended really, but it isn't as effective as I had hoped unfortunately. Glad you liked my direction though. This was my first attempt at it, and I've learned a lot from the process to take into my next project.

Cheers :)

Perhaps I have a dirty mind, but, at first, I thought it was going to be about her coming on her period and ruining the sheets.

I had a feeling at least one person would think that. Congratulations! :D

Had a play around with some different music on it. Does this work better?

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=f28O8KOFLtY

I think either music works, just not too mad on the end result.

Definitely well directed though.

Cheers :) After playing around with it for hours and hours, I'm starting to think that maybe I did just go the wrong way about it.

I'll just have to not make the same mistake next time :)