Hello there, I would appreciate it if I could get some feedback on this spoof 'Most Haunted' parody I made with a couple of friends.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sndGKkdYnCY&list=UU9Roe6SKIRigZgCrJOZDdEw

Thank you in advance.

Matt (First post)

Needs more jokes mate. You have 35 seconds before the 1st joke and the production values aren't high enough to keep the viewer engaged until that point. Could do with lots of cutting here and there. Get rid of everything that isn't a joke or key to the story.

Meant as constructive criticism. Don't be disheartened and welcome to the board

Thanks for your feedback Yacob. Appreciate you taking the time to view it and review.

I thought that was quite fun, but you can deffinitely tighten it up a lot

Yeah, the same as what they said. I thought it was okay, although I saw lots of missed opportunities for more jokes.

Keep going though, I'm sure you can iron this character out.

The characters are fun, but maybe a little over played.

Also if the reveal is the second guy is a stand in, maybe reveal it later if that's the punchline.

Quote: sootyj @ 23rd February 2015, 12:24 PM GMT

I thought that was quite fun, but you can deffinitely tighten it up a lot

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Does that line always work, sooty?

Quote: Lee @ 23rd February 2015, 1:08 PM GMT

Keep going though, I'm sure you can iron this character out.

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Quote: beaky @ 23rd February 2015, 3:32 PM GMT

Does that line always work, sooty?

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I kinda think that's between you and Leevil and if he in-presses you?