A short sketch we made about them electric fags:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xztx20cwMPw

Funny to start with, but no punch line! Like it runs out and you explain you have an wait an hour to re-charge the bugger! So bloke declines offer!
 

Great acting as usual Carlos. I agree with dellas, it needs something at the end otherwise it's a bit of an anti-climax. How about the guy trying to stub it out for later and snapping it in the process. Great idea nevertheless.
 

I liked this vid. But again, a punchline would have been nice. Mr Liar's suggestion of him trying to stub it is highly recommended.

Otherwise, very good.
 

I rather like this, it's very true life and natural.

And the humour though quite slight comes through nicely.
 

Thanks all for the feedback I appreciate it. At first I wanted to put a punchline in and then didn't think I had a strong enough one so left it out, I should have kept it in. I had 2 I was going to use, pretty simular to the suggestions.

1. As I gave the fag to Rob and walk off, he was going to ask me for the charger.

2. As I walk off he was going to shout after me, it's ok mate I don't smoke.

But in the end I did none of them, I thought it would have been ok just as it was, because it reminded me of the times we were in school and we would smoke behind the bike sheds, and asks for butts, shorties and last drags.

Thanks for the suggestions, I have learnt from it. ( I hope)

Doesn't need it but charger line would be sweet
 

I think my nostalgia made me short sighted, and I should have been more patient and worked on an ending.

I think to much into it, my thoughts were if he asks for the charger, then that meant he knew there was no butts or shorties on that type of fag,and if he said he didn't smoke, then he wouldn't have wanted a butt in the first place.