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March 7, 2009, 2:22 PM GMT
Edited by ShoePie on March 10 2009, 2:23 AM GMT

Decided to remove, Sorry.

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March 7, 2009, 2:39 PM GMT
Edited by ShoePie on March 7 2009, 2:47 PM GMT

EDIT: Comment removed as it related to a question I no longer need to ask.

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Kevin Murphy

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March 7, 2009, 5:41 PM GMT

The joke rate was good and fast.

For the penultimate line, I would have written, "But because you're clearly insane, let's call it £30m" or something.

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March 8, 2009, 6:10 PM GMT

Thanks Kevin.

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March 8, 2009, 7:09 PM GMT

Liked the premise and the girls line, very good.

As the entire Jackson clan is practically bankrupt, I'd have played with that a little more, with the promoter trying to reason the cost of the stage show and the other Jackson's trying to get in on the act.

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March 9, 2009, 6:44 PM GMT

Hey ShoePie

Feels a bit long. I think you need to find one aspect of the show and stick to that as it feels a bit all over the place at the moment.

Dan

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